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View Poll Results: Is this better than the first cut?
Yes, your **** is getting better. 9 47.37%
No, it needs work. 4 21.05%
I still wouldn't hire you to shoot a birthday party. 6 31.58%
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Old 09-04-2007, 03:23 AM #1
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My Demo Reel (2nd Cut)

New music, gore, tits, explosions! Please give me your feedback. This is to showcase my editing and camerawork skills. It ain't perfect, but its my 2nd draft. My final will have even more footage, but I wanna know if I'm going in the right direction with my choice of cuts, footage etc. So please, lemme know if this is better than the last one, and what you like or don't like about it.

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Old 09-04-2007, 03:23 AM #2
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Old 09-04-2007, 03:24 AM #3
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I saw the word ITS and read it as TITS and got excited. Damnit.
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Old 09-04-2007, 03:25 AM #4
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nosey, 4th word.
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Old 09-04-2007, 03:26 AM #5
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TITS!

Excited again.

Maybe I should actually read things in the future?
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Old 09-04-2007, 03:34 AM #6
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MUCH better than the last one.
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Old 09-04-2007, 03:34 PM #7
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Definatly an improvement. The one thing that annoyed me was how you shot the 4-wheeler. It just looks slow and wasn't exciting enough.
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Old 09-04-2007, 08:20 PM #8
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I agree. 4 wheeler stuff looked more like you just kinda went out and filmed your friend with no purpose. I realize it's a demo reel but I still don't like how everything is sort of pieced together.
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Old 09-04-2007, 08:32 PM #9
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didnt like the eye, too cliche with a bad subject doing it.

Good video other than that. There was a couple times when i was like wtf (long *** four wheelers and also the soccer game) Dont know how they played into perspective, but it was still pretty good.
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Old 09-04-2007, 08:46 PM #10
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Still lots of fluff...

Good addition of the dipping + dripping water. I think you could honestly make it 60 seconds, throw out all the filler stuff, and just keep me interested for the whole 60 secs. I think that'd be the best way to present it.

In terms of 'demo-reel-editing', you're doing fine. Subjects are explored and then you move on. Some of the cuts within these are a little odd, soccer immediately comes to mind. A little too jumpy.
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Old 09-04-2007, 10:03 PM #11
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I didn't like the shots of the feild. The glare was a bit much, and there was some unecessary camera movement in some of the shots (it looked like you were adjusting the camera mid-shot, not exactly professional).

There was some good stuff in there; I'd cut it down a bit more.

I made my own thread for mine to avoid jacking yours.

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Old 09-04-2007, 10:07 PM #12
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And yes, that did hold my interest more than Fatty's
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Old 09-10-2007, 02:57 AM #13
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Fatty Dave when are you gonna get a feature going?
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Old 09-10-2007, 04:09 AM #14
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When I'm ready, man. I'm practicing practicing praticing to smooth out my camerawork, tighten editing, lighting, etc etc. Its getting a lot better. I'll have a horror short finished in the next couple of weeks, then you *******s can help me decide if I should do a feature. If it captivates you guys, then its good enough for me! I dunno if its really gonna captivate anyone, but I can dream.
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Old 09-10-2007, 09:14 AM #15
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the fighting part was pretty neat. i think the soccer part would have been better if they were playing shirts vs skins.
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Old 09-10-2007, 09:35 AM #16
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I liked everything a bunch, except the four wheeler.
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Old 09-10-2007, 10:11 PM #17
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